pyramidman14's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Trudy Reveals a Secret]

Trudy, I didn't know you had brain cancer.

[Asbestos]

Alright, then.

[SpongeBob Experiences Delta P and Dies Instantly]

Potentially.

[Dusk's Flight]

Maybe.

[Loop de Loup]

Yes.

[Toy Story 2 Redialed | Director's Cut | Version 3.0]

Yes.

[A Den for Sick Moths]

Yes.

[What Lies Beneath]

I imagine miniature golf course managers get frustrated at having to waste thousands of pounds a year on new balls. Because of these cheeky blighters.

[Toxic]

I bet he gives people cancer like lice, and makes geiger counters go all the way up to 100 from a mile away. I'm sure he now lives in the Chernobyl exclusion zone.

[I WUZ A TEENAGE SERIAL KILLER?!]

I like the set up. What I initially thought you were building to was the mom forcing Wendy and Daniel to get to know one another through a rather awkward dinner, and Wendy realizing that Daniel is just as flawed and troubled as her. Thus, the Daniel and Wendy coming to an understanding of one another.
The animation was nice, and the voice acting was average. But the ending was rather tacked on and forced, and just feels like it's there due to having to meet a deadline or just having someone killed for the sake of it. I feel like if the story had given some time to breathe and flesh itself out a little, you would have something decent. Thus, I feel like you could've given more time for us the audience to get to know Wendy and Daniel (aforementioned above).
I don't know why, but I made a rewrite in my head today whilst out on a stroll. But I had the idea to keep the initial setup, but have it to where Wendy and Daniel are forced to clean Wendy's room due to the mom having guests over. Thus, them slowly getting to know one another through him, say, putting books and CDs away. It's not romantic, but it's just them working to get the room in order. I don't know, maybe I'm just overthinking this.

horrorhare responds:

haha wendeez nuts
(i just made this for school :3 i did have a super tight deadline, and i just wanted it to be fast paced and stupid! thank you for the thoughts and feedback tho! also, rendy is a guy lol)